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Thousands gathered
after the storm
I photographed
And listened.

The nursing home lady in the wheelchair
Her words:


We're defined by what we pass on
to the next generation
ever since the invention of the spear.
Is it your's?
Then it is mine.

What?

Ladybirds.

What?

The harlequin ladybug is no joke
Don't be fooled by its pretty pattern
Don't gather around those enormous machines.
The ladybirds.
They are aphid control.


Blacker than the blackest coffee
Her eyes:


Two groups have gone to war
We made ladybirds
Now we harvest.
Aphid carcasses littering this terra preta
The terra preta remains fertile now
And beyond I see that not all the graves are intact
Fragile silt.

They flew into
Time away from the living
The aphids.
You.
Me.
He, him, her, us, my daughters.

Today you can prepare for what's coming.
We hoped for the best.
But now
Aphid control.

I photographed the lady in the wheelchair
I was surprised to see her again.
©2008-2009 ~mintleaves
:iconmintleaves:

Author's Comments

This is a found poem I created for the :iconwriters-workshop: workshop on found poetry. I wrote this poem using sentence fragments and individual words from a September 2008 National Geographic magazine entitled "Where Food Begins."

This is my first "found" poem, and it was a joy to write. I had no theme in mind when I opened the magazine, but by the time I was finished collecting sentences a story about weapons called "ladybirds" had formed in my mind. The ladybirds are machines that have a mind of their own and attack their creators (humans).In my poem, human beings are the aphids...So, this is sort of my take on the "machines turning against their creators" theme. Very "I, Robot", I know.

Please enjoy!

Comments and constructive criticism welcome!

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:iconbirthstone:
Very nice
I like shot poem ;P

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Nature the master of the creation
Learn more nature's geometry please go here
[link]
:iconbirthstone:
I mean, short poem ;P

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Nature the master of the creation
Learn more nature's geometry please go here
[link]
:iconmintleaves:
Thank you!!

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it's spring when the world is puddle-wonderful
:iconbirthstone:
your welcome

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Nature the master of the creation
Learn more nature's geometry please go here
[link]
:iconauroraishcrazy:
I like this a lot! Very cool poem. Its so much fun making these type of poems =) I love the idea you used, and the poem itself is really original. Very cool.

~Aura :heart:

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Never regret anything that made you smile

This Is How All Great Tragedies Start

"People tell you everything, Aura. They tell me everything else."
:iconmintleaves:
Thank you--I'm really glad you enjoyed it! I have to agree with you, created a found poem was a lot of fun. I really want to write more of them now.

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it's spring when the world is puddle-wonderful
:iconauroraishcrazy:
Me too =)

--
Never regret anything that made you smile

This Is How All Great Tragedies Start

"People tell you everything, Aura. They tell me everything else."
:icondesert-lilly:
*laughs* I liked it a lot, because of the flow and the words, but I didn't really get it until I read your comment. So I read the poem again, and now I love it!
For some odd reason, I like the last two lines the best.

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"He had a heart that could have held the empire of the world; and, in the end, he had to content himself with a cellar."

"Oh, well I never, was there ever a cat so clever as Magical Mister Mistofelees?"
:iconmintleaves:
I'm really glad you liked it! ^^

Yeah, when I wrote it I felt like the message was straight forward, but after I showed it to my dad and boyfriend I realized that it only seemed straight forward because I knew what I was writing about...Oh well. It happens. :p

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it's spring when the world is puddle-wonderful

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